Things to consider

I believe i did have enough detail in my descripting of the field.

1. The school that field was on I went to my whole life. From kindergarten until graduation. Throughout my time there I played Lacrosse, football, soccer, and even had PE on that field. I had a lot of good wins and hard losses. I’ve bleed, I’ve cried, and I’ve sweat on that field for many years. Even now I still go back and coach on that field. These were the moments that affected me the most on that field.

2. One way to do this is to take a character from that place and in order to establish some character development behind that particular person you can build a little character development through this. Another way is to describe another situation that was similar to the one you were experiencing, and use it as an explanation as to why you reacted the way you did.

3. You have to know who you are intending to read this personal narrative. If they are very emotional you should probably try to use more Pathos to try and get to them. If they are an extremely logical and academically oriented audience then use more Logos.

4. I believe they have values of standing up for you friends, and fighting to try and help them as well as yourself. The sports were fun, but the reason I played was because i was surrounded by all my best friends and it made me want to work hard for them.

Character

Full Name: Garritt Crosby Schwarz

Gender: Male

Age and Date of Birth (as your story does not need to have a contemporary

setting): he was 17 and his birthday is december 31st 1998

Birth City: Madison Connecticut

Parent’s Names: Tara Schwarz and Charlie Schwarz

Siblings: he has 4 brothers. Tyler, Kyle, Tucker, and Max

Ethnicity: White

Pets: He had 4 dogs and 2 cats.

Education: Attended Maclay High School with me during the personal narrative, and currently attends Roanoke University

Favorite Movie: Good Will Hunting

Favorite TV Show: Friday Night Lights

Favorite Book:

Favorite Food:

Favorite Day of the Week: Saturday

Favorite Hobby: Lacrosse

Favorite Drink: blue powerade

Favorite Band: The Eagles

Favorite Song: Peaceful Easy Feeling

Favorite Halloween Costume (if s/he celebrated Halloween): He would dress as a banana

Religious affiliation: Father was Jewish and mother was Catholic. He was Catholic.

Political affiliation: didn't really pay attention to politics

Love interest(s): In love with Anne Jackson McClure but her dad hated him so they never ended up completely dating.

Physical Description 6 foot 4 inches but pretty skinny. He has a little brown birthmark on his chin. Really athletic.

Eye Color: brown

Hair Color and Style: Brown and he always had bed head.

Height: 6 foot 4 inches

Weight: 180 lbs

Skin Tone: white, but pretty tan.

Facial Description (does s/he have a unique nose, forehead, eyes, ears, lips,

ect.?): He had a small brown birthmark shaped like California on his chin.

Clothes (what s/he is wearing or usually wears):

Other Physical Characteristics (booty, busty, muscular, corpulent, scrawny,

disproportioned, ect.): He was very athletic, but he was never muscular or anything, looked like an average tall guy.

Defining Moments: When AJ’s dad told him to stop talking to his daughter. When he was a kid his 4 older brothers would fight him a lot so he had to get tough fast.

The one childhood instance—good or bad—that indelibly affects who this

character is now: In middle school he fell in love with a girl named Kylee, but she ended up moving to Nashville after 8th grade year and he thought that really stunk.

The character’s proudest moment: Getting recruited by all these colleges and eventually signing to play lacrosse in college.

The character’s most embarrassing moment: getting hit really hard on the lacrosse field in front of everyone.

The character’s career goals of future aspirations/ambitions: He wanted to play lacrosse in college at the time of the story but he still doesn't know what he wants to do.

Whom the character would most like to have dinner with (past or present)

and why: Probably Joe Rogan. He loved his podcast and really liked him as a whole.

Three adjectives the character would use to describe him/herself: Best looking kid in school, athletic, humble.